From: office Manager

To: all staff

Subject: upgarde of computer system

As our computer system need to be upgraded, we have arranged the contarctors to upgrade the them [1]on Wedesday. On that day all computers should be shutted down for a full day, so you need arrange some alternative work for that day.

名师修改意见：

[1]第一: 不要重复使用前面已经用过的词;第二：指代错误，前面说的system 是单数，怎么到这里变成了them? 合成一句：as we have arranged the contractor to upgrade our computer system.

本期作文题目：

Formulate a smoking policy for your office which is fair to both smokers and nonsmokers. Write a 40-50 word memo informing all staff of the policy.

提示：

我们需要确定，如果我是公司职员，我要在这篇memo中获得什么信息?是不是要知道：

1.新的吸烟政策从什么时候开始;

2.吸烟区划定在什么地方?

TO: All Employees

FROM: CEO, Willan Smith

SUBJECT: NEW SMOKING POLICY

For all the employees, especially smokers,[1] plz be aware that our company’s new smoking policy has been formulated as follow: A main smoking area’s going to be restricted before Next MONDAY[2], anyone is not allowed to smoker in non-smoking zone even in the washing room.[3]

Plz target the smoking and non-smoking area and stick to the company’s new policy.[4]

Thx.

名师指导：

[1]去掉，抬头已经写过给所有的员工，所以直接从正文开始就行了，费这个事干什么?

[2]时间不确切，最好是 from next Monday. Before 这个期限是什么时候?如果不能给出确切信息，就不要说，还不如换成具体的吸烟区域更好: be restricted to the room next to the toilet.

[3]你经常在洗手间吸烟吗?或者你们公司有这样的同事?把这句话去掉。

[4]添加：to ensure that it is fair to all of you.